#FirstLineFriday

The first few lines of Capturing a Countess’ Heart, Chronicles of the Heart – Book 1 are:

“You win every -?” Charlotte shot off before Matthew could finish his question leaving him with nothing more than the trail of her laughter.  He watched her speeding away on her horse.

“Oh hell,” he muttered and took off to chase down the peach ribbons of her bonnet whipping in the wind.

What do you think? Any suggestions or thoughts you can offer?  Leave a comment and help an aspiring writer out 🙂

Also, why not give it a try and let others give you feedback about your first few lines?

This idea was inspired by Deidra Alexander at Deidra Alexandra’s Blog.

The rules for #FirstLineFriday are:

1. Create a post on your blog entitled #FirstLineFriday, hashtag and all.
2. Explain the rules like I’m doing now.
3. Post the first one or two lines of a potential work, a work-in-progress, or a completed or published story.
4. Ask your readers for feedback and then encourage them to try #FirstLineFriday on their blogs (tagging is encouraged but not necessary).